Haiku | “no pearl warmer than your skin”

February 21, 2016 by Peter Galen Massey

no gold more precious / than this light, no pearl’s luster / warmer than your skin

Posted in Haiku | Tagged haiku, Poems | 3 Comments

on March 15, 2016 at 8:16 am | Reply Peter Galen Massey

Massey Grade: B

Massey Comment: Okay, this one is pretty good. Doubled metaphor and the contrast between possessions and experience all in 17 syllables. Line breaks fall right. And it ain’t some precious little doodle about nature, which God knows I got a lot of.
on March 26, 2016 at 10:11 am | Reply susanriverside

One of your best for sure IMO
- on March 26, 2016 at 10:29 am | Reply Peter Galen Massey
  
  Haven’t decide my grade for this one yet, but I’m inclining toward B+. It’s more cheerful than many, always a welcome change. Botticelli’s Venus is the reference sitting deep deep in the background by the by.