Massey Comment: I like the words in this, but the syntax is scrambled to fit the form and it scrambles the sense as well, this haiku is nothing but description, and overall I feel like the Muse gave me a pitch to hit here and I just fouled the damn thing off instead of driving it into the right center gap and cruising into second with a stand up double.
Massey Grade: C+
Massey Comment: I like the words in this, but the syntax is scrambled to fit the form and it scrambles the sense as well, this haiku is nothing but description, and overall I feel like the Muse gave me a pitch to hit here and I just fouled the damn thing off instead of driving it into the right center gap and cruising into second with a stand up double.