Massey Comment: This seems like one of my better ones. Each line is a discrete unit and is stitched together with similarities in the sounds of the words (the “il” + “il” + “il” in the second line for example). The images are vivid and give you a feeling of the moment — particularly the sense of mystery and wonder in the scene. At least, so I hope.
Massey Grade: B+
Massey Comment: This seems like one of my better ones. Each line is a discrete unit and is stitched together with similarities in the sounds of the words (the “il” + “il” + “il” in the second line for example). The images are vivid and give you a feeling of the moment — particularly the sense of mystery and wonder in the scene. At least, so I hope.