Peter Galen Massey

Posted in Haiku | Tagged haiku, modern haiku, Poems | 6 Comments

6 Responses

1. on June 18, 2017 at 4:47 pm | Reply Maureen Sudlow

   I wish

   
   
   • on June 18, 2017 at 6:07 pm | Reply Peter Galen Massey

     Mine don’t come any other way, so I don’t have much choice in the matter

     
     
2. on June 19, 2017 at 6:59 am | Reply johnmcellhenney

   RST would like this. So do I! Love Pop

   Sent from my iPhone

   >

   
   
   • on June 19, 2017 at 3:29 pm | Reply Peter Galen Massey

     Thanks. I’m not quite happy with the “poems” (plural) but the “bird” (singular). Seems like they should match. I fiddled the second line to keep the “like” and not run out of syllables … but I’m wondering if “you wait in patience / stillness. the poem alights / a bird on your hand” wouldn’t be better, the like implied and the line break doing most of the job for me. And the word “like” has a harsh metallic sound, nice to get rid of that beastie. Yes, I think I like the revision better.

     
     
3. on January 9, 2018 at 1:37 pm | Reply onalongsabbatical

   This is beautiful. The incredible directness of the poem and the bird as one entity/experience.

   
   
   • on January 9, 2018 at 2:46 pm | Reply Peter Galen Massey

     Thanks! P.

     
     

Leave a Reply Cancel reply

Enter your comment here...

Please log in using one of these methods to post your comment:

Email (Address never made public)

Name

Website

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. ( Log Out /  Change )

You are commenting using your Google account. ( Log Out /  Change )

You are commenting using your Twitter account. ( Log Out /  Change )

You are commenting using your Facebook account. ( Log Out /  Change )

Cancel

Connecting to %s

Notify me of new comments via email.

Notify me of new posts via email.

Δ

This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.